100 Word Story Contest

I'm entering an 100 word story contest and have done two drafts of a potential entry - I would like any opinions you have at all. It has to be EXACTLY 100 words, so there's not a great deal of room for manoeuvre.

ATTEMPT 1

Wilberforce, twitching in the waiting room, sweating into his feathers. This was the day. The day of truth, everything had been leading to this – the fateful meeting – maybe he'd have real parents now! Too sweet a thought, Wil, you'll set yourself up for disappointment.

He thought about the life that was waiting on the other side of the door. Every squeak of a chair and creak of a door sent him into a frenzy of trepidation. The door opened and he went in.

'Mr. Scops, there's no easy way to tell you this – You're an Owl.'

'Hoot.'

ATTEMPT 2

Wilberforce, twitching in the waiting room, sweating into his feathers. This was the day. The day of truth, everything had been leading to this – the fateful meeting – maybe he'd have real parents now! Too sweet a thought, Wil, you'll set yourself up for disappointment.

He thought about the life that was there, waiting, on the other side of the door. Every squeak of a chair and creak of a door sent him into a frenzy of trepidation. The door opened and he went in.

'Mr. Scops, there's no easy way to tell you this – You're an Owl.'

Only a very minor difference I'll admit - but still, if you read this any have any opinions either way. Let me know. Please.